This is a snippet of the story that I am trying to write these days. Any suggestions/comments are welcome.
The dead weights stacked on top of each other moved with brisk pace as he pulled on the cable curling handle. Shifting his concentration from the uniform movement of the weights to the mirror put up in front of him, he saw his reflection give him a smug look. It was as though the reflection was secretly laughing at him for the state of his current affairs. He wasn’t the gym type. He knew it and it unsettled him. He let go the handle of his gym equipment and took respite near the water cooler.
His hands were shaking from the heavy gym sessions he had been indulging in, of late. The water moved as the glass quaked in his shaky hands. The pattern of the moving water mesmerized him as he was reminded of the ocean. The memory of the waves calmed him down as his hands stopped shaking. He dunked the water down and saw through the window in front of him which looked out onto the busy street. He hated traffic. Uniformity and predictability weren’t his style, but chaos on the streets wasn’t something he was a fan of either. He heard a faint noise in the background calling “xyz” out to him. Looking toward the source, he saw his gym instructor calling him back. Getting his attention back to the task on hand he went back inside the gym for completing his cable curling workout.
All credits to this go to Mandar for giving me the idea of using zero-distraction editors, which got me over my inertia of writing. jDarkRoom _/\_
PS: this is not based (loosely or otherwise) on me or anyone I know.
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Dude, for slim punks like u and me, this is the perfect description of a gym experience..[;)]
Carry on the good work..
Whew thanks.
And really accurate description of the state of someone normal after working out.. :P
I read the last two posts as well not noticing that the titles were on the left as opposed to the conventional top, thinking that the weird paragraph gaps were some fetish of yours :|
Nice start btw :) Let’s see where this goes
While I know that this is not very pertinent to the topic of creative writing editors, I would still like to state here that Notepad++ is totally off the hook! (wild look, with two thumbs up) It is, by far, the most versatile+small+neat free text editor out there, particularly when you use your laptop for C programming, general text editing, hex debugging, blah-la-blah, blah.
Very interesting. Needs some changes in word choice, but good nonetheless.
Hmmm. Curious. Slow start, but sounds like it could go somewhere. Once I get proper internet, maybe we could get the story somewhere.
oooh!! fancy!
do i get to do the appendix to this one??